I summed you up
in ten pages, as many
secondary sources, your craft
synopsized, an A-grade term paper,
but I am unsure
of what to make of this
moment: the particular purse
of your lips, the over-emphasized syllables
made monstrous
by microphone,
some proof that you––
like the rest of us––squint unflatteringly
under the wide-
eyed spotlight. You pause
and the static makes the sound
of flowers uprooted from soft earth.
Prompt via Bigtentpoetry.org
7 comments:
Nice work - I particularly like 'static makes the sound/of flowers uorooted from soft earth'. Nice!!
Wow Nathan, this is tremendous! Allowing those two words to carry the weight was a smart move. I like the structure of the stanzas, how the hanging lines can read as a poem all on their own.
That last line is particularly gorgeous.
"squint unflateringly" - like the harsh spotlight sponges all sensibility! A refreshingly creative poem!
a great use of "purse" as in lips! Interesting poem.
Hi Nathan -- glad I found your poem..I love the layout of your poem as well as the story you told. Especially liked the "syllables//made monstrous/by microphone..."
The end? Luscious...I don't believe I've ever read a more poetic description of how that static sounds...brilliant!
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i like the form of this -- how you've arranged the stanzas, emphasizing the lines on margin (i even liked reading them alone as their own poem)
Enjoyed this a lot! I agree with comments made about your last three lines. Nice work!
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