Friday, June 18, 2010

Fatherly

Part of the comfort of stars
is the marching procession
of empty between them. I resent

when you tell me not to look
at your finger as it conducts
my eyes. Its dull details––

scar from a compound fracture,
tendons that disappear
into walnut knuckles––

are more present than
the dim shining of the distant
and praise-hungry sky.


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12 comments:

Julie Jordan Scott said...

Tonight when I look up at the heavens, I will see it differently.

Love the marching procession and the emptiness between... mmmm.

flaubert said...

The opening line had me hooked!
Nice work!
Pamela

brenda w said...

This first line repeats itself in my head again and again. I love it. Excellent response to the wordle. Bravo!

Raven's Wing Poetry said...

The first stanza is absolutely gorgeous, and your poems pulls me in until the very last line. I like how you contrast the realness of the finger with the distant dream of the night sky. Well done.

-Nicole

caroleesherwood said...

a wonderful reminder to notice what's right in front of us. :)

義珊 said...

you did a good job..................................................

Mr. Walker said...

The near and the far, the light and the dark are all in your poem, balanced and poignant. An excellent use of the words from the prompt.

thelaughinghousewife said...

I love this poem. My Dad used to show the stars to me when I was a child and it evoked so many memories - and I used to look at his finger as well!

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Deb said...

I'm with the others, especially "marching procession/ of empty between them." and how the poem portrays -- so quickly -- a significant relationship & its complexities.

Cynthia Short said...

I also agree that "the marching procession - of empty between them" is just a magically written thought.

Tumblewords: said...

A magical piece - comfort comes from many places.

楊韋以 said...

人因夢想而偉大,要堅持自己的理想哦.................................................................