There is also the matter of my uncle,
who, after the crash, was found
to have bent the steering wheel
around its steady column. His arms
are slack now, the skin loose, room
for so much more than is there,
but that day, so my aunt tells it,
the ring of the wheel curved in
on itself, like a taco shell, she always
says––for this is not the first time
we have heard the story; waiting
room, funeral home, church,
a podium facing lacquered pews––
weather always the same bone-
dry desert wind and a cloud of dust
that scuds onto the road, obscuring
the telephone pole like clockwork.
This is where we, having known
him, still manage to expect some
casual line, I'll be goddamned, when in fact
he was clearly blessed, but no matter
the repetitions, the story always ends
the same way: steering wheel bent
with his own two hands, hands that opened
the twisted door of the old truck,
brushed the glass from his shirt.
20 comments:
I do like this poem. I'm so glad tehre was a happy ending. It was unexpected, which turns convention on its head.
I enjoyed your poem. Nice job with the prompt.
Mad Kane
The ending is unexpected and welcome - and it adds to the life of the man. I might have guessed it with the lead-off phrase. I thought about starting my poem with that phase, too, and I really like what you did with the prompt. Very smooth/ good enjambment.
What a very well constructed narrative. I love the play on goddamned and blessed.
Well done... I love the surprise ending!
~laurie
www.lkharris-kolp.blogspot.com
Amazing poem, with a good ending. : )
Well-structured and told. The line breaks and enjambment lead through the story but the clarity of personalities is what I like the best, as well as the speaker's voice.
Yes, the voice in this poem is great! Down-homesy! Love that.
Masterfully told. Great lead, build-up and release. Nice work
Here's my far less subtle attempt: http://www.kimnelsonwrites.com/2011/03/04/gothic-romance-in-verse/
I love the way you combined the visual with a strong narrative, and especially how you used that bent steering wheel as an anchor in the piece.
-Nicole
That is getting maximum milage from a prompt. Great poem, story and ending.
http://thepoetsquill.wordpress.com/
This is a really lovely piece - great narrative rhythm.
Terrific narrative style piece. Love the story...
Sad, poignant, profound. The return of the steering wheel...wow.
I liked the way you ended it...
rivulets of
space
I really enjoyed this one. Great details.
i love the rhythm of your poetry.
Brilliant poem.
A splendid tale indeed. The language rings... the "taco shell" bit especially, it's so specific and unique to this.
lovely imaginations. well done..
here is my try:
http://itistimetothinkformyself.blogspot.com/2011/03/big-tent-poetry-in-55-words.html
thanks for reading.
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